My chapter of choice from “They Say I Say” was The art of quoting. In this chapter it discusses ways to introduce quotations, something I seemed to be missing a bit in this essay. I found their description of what the introductory/ lead-in claims should show and explain most helpful when I re-read some of my paragraphs. I realized I had a few quotes that weren’t introduced nor described very well in how it related to my claim.
Original:
In order for science to overcome their current self-limitations, they need to integrate the artistic focus on the big picture thinking. In Marine biology field work, we are frequently exclusively looking at one single input, one single species or quadrant. However, the environment is far too complex to be able to compensate for only a single input. It is often that in science we complicate things far more than what we ourselves can understand. In art, especially painters have a specific focus on attention to details. When you’re painting you pay attention to every single little detail in the area around you so that it can feel as real as it possible and can adequately represent and replicate that area. In science you can’t merely focus on one single input “before you break something apart, it helps to know how it hangs together” (Lehrer). An example of this maybe if you’re in the forest and studying the distribution of a plant. If you’re only focusing on that one quadrant you may be missing a bigger picture. For all you know the trees around the section of plants are dying, could that have any effect on the distribution of this plant or its population? What is it that is causing the trees to die and could it have any impact on what you’re studying? Or more specifically in marine biology you would look at how does the tide influence this animal or plant or how does the, sunlight and weather conditions all the abiotic conditions affect this organism and how could it cause it to react differently. Art is very much about recognizing the connections between everything that surrounds us and us. Scientists should take art to help them evolve and strengthen this tool.
Revised:
I order for Marine sciences to overcome their current self-limitations, they need to integrate the artistic focus on the big picture thinking. In Marine biology field work, we are frequently and exclusively looking at one single input, one single species or quadrant. However, the environment is far too complex to be able to compensate for only a single input. Jonah Lehrer an American author and neurologist discusses in “The future of science…is Art?” how science could benefit from the integration of art. He brings up the idea that “before you break something apart, it helps to know how it hangs together”. In marine science you can’t merely focus on a single input, at least not until you’ve looked at the bigger picture around you. It is often that in science we complicate things far more than what we ourselves can understand. In art, especially painters have a specific focus on attention to details. When you’re painting you pay attention to every single little detail in the area around you so that it can feel as real as it possible and can adequately represent and replicate that area. An example of this maybe if you’re in the forest and studying the distribution of a plant. If you’re only focusing on that one quadrant you may be missing a bigger picture. For all you know the trees around the section of plants are dying, could that have any effect on the distribution of this plant or its population? What is it that is causing the trees to die and could it have any impact on what you’re studying? Or more specifically in marine biology you would look at how does the tide influence this animal or plant or how does the, sunlight and weather conditions all the abiotic conditions affect this organism and how could it cause it to react differently. Art is very much about recognizing the connections between everything that surrounds us and us. Scientists should take art to help them evolve and strengthen this tool.
Well done!